April 13, 2012


Hey Ya'll!

I shared with you several weeks ago that I joined "31 Days to Become a Better Writer" writers group and want to share  a short story  I wrote for today's challenge.  Our assignment was to write a story inspired by the picture below.  I would love to hear what you think about it.....I pray that it blesses you!  So, without further adieu, here's....                       
"Safely Home"

photo courtesy of Fey IIyas

She'd waited for this day for thirteen long, grueling, lonely months.  
With a bold black marker she had carefully marked off each day on her tattered kitchen calendar until she reached today's date.   Today's date, however, was lovingly marked with a pink heart and it was on this beautiful chilly August afternoon she would finally hold her dream next to her heart.  With long halting breaths and her heart atwitter, she readied herself for the impending moment that she'd dreamed and longed for with every fiber of her being.  She'd driven all night to get here.  Weary from her travels, she found a comfortable sofa and anxiously settled in for the wait.  

The muffled sounds of nervous excited laughter began to fill the air as others gathered close by.  "This is the moment they dreamed and prayed for too", she whispered within her heart.  With hands clasped, head bowed and eyes tightly closed, she thanked the Lord for giving her the strength to hold on and for His sweet assurance that her dream was in His safekeeping.  Warm tears welled in her beautiful brown eyes as she felt His presence ever so closely.  A feeling and knowing she'd experienced continually during those thirteen months.  "Thank you Jesus" she whispered as a gentle smile broke upon her glowing tear stained face.

With each passing moment her pulse raced with anxious anticipation.  "What will I say?" "How will I act" she pondered.  And then, the magical moment she'd dreamt about began to unfold before her very eyes.  Rapt attention was drawn toward the large grey double doors beneath an enormous American flag at the far end of the room.  Beautiful patriotic melodies filled the air as a band began to play.  Joyous squeals erupted from the crowd as the doors ceremoniously swung open and 200 of America's bravest flooded in.

With widened eyes wet with tears, a pounding heart and a gleeful grin, she gazed from afar into every face in search for her hero....the one who melts her heart.

And then suddenly, in the midst of the crowd, her gaze caught the steel blue eyes of her beloved.  It was as if time stood still and all else faded from view.  And with a broad smile he bolted through the crowd and fell into the safety of her warm loving embrace and they wept for joy.  The Lord had brought her soldier safely home!


Love and Sweet Blessings!
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rcubes said...

The anticipation...the wrenching gut feeling if everything would be okay...the buckets of tears...the waiting in hours down to minutes but felt like eternity..

Your words brought me back when my hubby was in the Navy, involved in a war, not sure when that time of seeing him again would occur...Indeed, it was only the Lord Who knew and saw it all and the One Who hears countless petitions, day in and out. And what a wondrous feeling it truly was to see him again, safe and more mature from the hardships he had gone through...Oh how I wish for all our military to be home, safe and back to their loved ones who also learn to endure...God bless. I enjoy your short stories.

Anonymous said...

Okay... Even though it was titled "Safely Home", you actually had me wondering from the beginning. I almost skipped to the end to find out she had been waiting for.
Very NICE! I found myself left wanting to know what happens next!
Wonderful writing Jackie.

Andrea said...

Awesome! Keep writing sweet friend. You truly have a gift!


Kathleen said...

Given the many wars of recent years, you just know this scene is playing over over-and-over in various parts of the country. I'm so glad you took us there. It's far better to have a sense of homecoming's sweetness than to never give it much thought.


Debbie said...

This was very good! You had me anxiously waiting to hear what she'd been waiting for! Good job! HUGS

elaine @ peace for the journey said...

Wow... I kept wondering what her big surprise would be! Great writing, Jackie. I love taking the prompt of a picture and making it your own story. Funny, we do that with people, don't we? We see them in a crowd and imagine their stories.

Keep at it! This is a fun activity and certainly gets the creative juices flowing.


NanaNor's said...

Jackie, Like all our friends above who left such nice comments, there isn't much more that I could say except well done! Your writing carries us along and makes us share a journey with you...great job dear friend. Keep the stories coming!
Hugs, Noreen
p.s. so glad you are back with us again-we all missed you!

NanaDiana said...

Thank you for finding me, Jackie! I found you back! What a wonderful, wonderful story-beautifully written and emotional. Love it- I am your newest follower and, Lord love ya, you are stuck with me now! xo Diana
ps.. When I saw the name of your blog I thought maybe you worked in at a LubePros' oil change shop!;>)

pps. Hey...you might want to take your double word verification off. It does keep people from commenting and blogger is great at catching spam. If you don't know how to do it and want to let me know and I will email you the instructions.

outjunking said...

I am so looking forward to reading more of your stories. This was quite good.
Your newest follower,

Anonymous said...

Made me tear up! It's awesome! As a Navy wife who's lived this short story...You captured in every word the emotions of those LONG and final few moments!!! Beautiful Story!!

Nezzy (Cow Patty Surprise) said...

Oh how I sooo adore happily ever after Miss Jackie and this was the best!!! Great write my friend!

God bless ya and have yourself a glorious day!!! :o)

Karen said...

Very good! And it did bless me...I love happy endings!

Saleslady371 said...

Very nice! What a great ending!

Crown of Beauty said...

Good story, Jackie, and it kept me in suspense, I could hardly wait to read the ending!

Thank you for putting in a beautiful ending to the story.

Your creativity brings joy and delight to your readers!


Dawning Inspiration said...

What a great class! You did fabulous!

Connie Arnold said...

That was beautiful! It brought tears to my eyes. Nicely written!

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